Diaspora 1st edition hardcover errata

Hardcover first edition (r5 at Lulu)

p. xi: "But the blood the flowed through Lawrence's veins..." Should be "But the blood that flowed through...."

p. xiv: reference to Spirit of the Century should also credit Leonard Balsera.

p. 2: "alternatives to "yes" exists" should likely be without the S on exists.

p. 4: under Abstractions, "player locations" should read "character locations".

p. 4: "There are no necessary mechanical Consequences of this..." "Consequences" should possibly not be capitalized since this is speaking generally, not about Consequences as in the damage mechanic.

p. 9: "by the time the turn comes back to whoever generated it..." Perhaps should be "back to whomever"?

p. 10: "limited by": replace Strength with Stamina.

p.14: "Faster-than-light travel between stars only occur along these paths." Should be "only occurs along".

p.24, near the top: "(war, pollution, botched terraforming...)"
Is an ellipsis needed here? Maybe end with "etc" rather than trail off.

p.27, "Or just let you book passage?"
Looks like there's an extra space between "book" and "passage".

p.28, near the bottom, "Interests of the system is determined..."
Should be "are determined".

p.29, last paragraph, "Due to the hazardous natural of the planetoids..."
Should be "hazardous nature of".

p.29, last paragraph, "Robotics run many of the factories..."
Verb should be "runs" if speaking of the science of robotics.
If "robotics" is supposed to be some sort of plural (assuming a "robotic" is a single robot for some reason), then it's fine as-is.

p.31, "...had to use the Old One's tech..."
Since "Old Ones" is used later in the paragraph, I'm guessing it is plural, so this passage should be "the Old Ones' tech."

p.37, "...might be used to evaluate data system..."
Should be "systems".

p.37 and p.38, "as a apex skill" phrase used in both places.
Should be "as an apex skill".

p. 39: under MicroG, for "Weapns" put "Weapons"

Page 39: MicroG skill: Should "instinctively ignoring ballistics and coriolis effects" be instead "instinctively compensating for ballistics and coriolis effects"?

p.40, "...reaction drives ship in use for intra- and well as..."
I think this is supposed to read "...reaction drives ships use for..." or else "...reaction drive ships in use..."

pp. 40 and 45, and maybe other places: It looks like you're inconsistent with the use of "Pilot" and "Piloting" as the name of the Skill. Page 40 says "Pilot"; page 45 says "Military-grade Piloting".
p. 43: On page 43 under Culture/Tech, the section on Weapon Familiarity didn't click for me until I read the simplified description on the downloadable skill reference sheet. The book version was just awkward

p.44, "Tracks start out with three boxes in them..."
The word "three" is used here, but later in the paragraph, stress track lengths are given in numerals: "...the track is 4 boxes." This same sort of thing shows up later on the page under Consequences, where damage reduction is written with words instead of numbers, e.g, "reduces them by two." Might just be a peeve of mine, but I figure that if you're talking about dice modifiers or damage or stats, you should use numbers, e.g., "reduces them by 2."

p.45, "Whoe-ever scored that fatal hit..."
Hyphenation weirdness, but it should be "Who-ever".

Page 45: Military-Grade? Stunts: "For space Skills, the effect varies by system." The word "system" could be read as referring to star systems rather than the ship's technological systems. "varies by Skill" would probably be clearer, unless you can come up with a short synonym for a ship's technological system.

p. 45: "Military-grade Electronic Warfare" should be "Military-grade Communications".

p. 45: Stunts, Military-grade: It might be useful to have a full list of all of the system-canonical MG Skills here, to minimize the necessity of hunting through the space combat section of the rules when making up characters. As far as I can tell, these are: Armour, Communications, Computer, Energy Weapons, Pilot, Slug Thrower.

p. 49: under free form stunts, left an extra "it" in the line: "it might even be agreed that it the Stunt is cool but powerful" The it can go.

p. 50: "Nothing guarantees the continued presence of the equipment, unless there is also an Stunt to cover it." An should be a.

p. 58: "aproproate" is spelled wrong.

p. 62: example characters should have three aspects or explicitly blank slots

p. 69: table heading "Earth to Moon" should say 400,000 km instead of 400,00 km.

p. 70, Space Travel, Extended Range: "Ships with the 'Extended range' Stunt cannot conduct an overburn, since they are not outside the 'design efficiency' envelope for mass versus drive design." This sentence makes my head hurt; it took three reads to get to the point where I think I know what it means: Are you saying that because of the extra mass they're carrying around, an overburn would be so dramatically inefficient as to eat up all their reaction mass, or something? That would imply that an overburn might be feasible late in the trip, when much of the reaction mass has been used up. (BJM: No idea. Re-write this so it's not stupid)



Page 75: "The ship needs to roll *it's* Trade Skill.".



p. 84: "the turbulent oceans team with algae" should be "teem with algae"

p. 93: Qantii's stunt is inconsistent with the Swap a Skill description elsewhere — she has no Bureaucracy skill and the stunt description requires it. Fix one or the other.



p. 93, Quantii's stunt On the Grift says use Grifter for Charm on a new world. As her Charm is higher in the pyramid this would seem to mean that the stunt makes her worse at her Profession of Grifter.



p. 101: clarification: the text discussing success and failure is misleading — in Fate a zero shift result is always a success, but when you use the shifts for effect, a zero shift result has no effect. It's still a success though.

p. 101: "If the character is attacked a second or further times, before acting, use the roll on the table whenever the same skill is used for defense." Clarify: one defensive roll, per skill, per turn.

p. 102, last sentence of Attack sidebar: current wording implies that if you defend then you cannot attack next time you act. Or is it supposed to mean you can't attack with the skill you defended with? Clarify this (I think it assumes you only have one relevant skill to attack with, which is wrong — maybe use a concrete example: if you use Slug Thrower to defend then you won't be able to shoot anyone offensively).



p. 108: In second row of section "example: getting a finger shot off", p. 108 there is the word "Defence" written using british spelling, whereas the american "-ense" spelling is used throughout the whole book.

p. 114: Delete "civilian" from "The basic cost for a ... slug thrower is 3." maybe change to "Modify costs in the table by the difference ... a T4 system."

p. 115: same as 114

p. 116: "Out of juice" should refer to Energy Weapons here rather than this cut and paste error that refers to powered armour.

p. 117: same as 114

p. 151: T3 Registered Interdiction Trader; Line two - should be blockades.

pp. 138-139, Space Combat: The rules for Coupling are a bit ambiguous. It seems (due to the use of the word "push") that the active ship is behind the inactive one, but in the text it's also referred to as the "lead" ship. (BJM: assume the controlling ship is the one behind as trad towing would burn the other ship up)

p. 161: "Example." should be "Example:"

p. 164: "by creating and atmosphere" -> "by creating an atmosphere"

p. 166: Social minigame, Move action: It refers to eroding pass values ("expending movement points as needed to erode any pass values that might be on borders"). Does this mean pass values always go away as a token moves over them (or tries to), as opposed to map features in personal combat, which are generally persistent?

p. 170, Social Combat, the map: In the 1 circle, the label ("Free Lostengo!") looks a bit low in the circle.

pp. 170-171 (the "Changing History" social combat example): The pawn for Academics starts in zone 3. Neither side moves it in Turn 1. In Turn 2, both sides attempt to move it, and both fail, so it should still be in Zone 3. In Turn 3, the TSS crew uses Move Another on the Academics, and gets "a little movement, from zone 5 back to 3"; this can't be right if the Academics have never left zone 3. Also, in the Turn 3 paragraph, the word "they" is split across two lines as "the" and "y".

p. 172: The OP chooses to "erode" an obstacle. I don't think this is mentioned as an option in the rules.

p. 172: "makes it impossible for the Aristorcracy Aristocracy"

p. 179: sidebar, 8th entry, after the em dash: "gain, poker chips under the miniatures are very tidy." Should start with "again" not "gain."

p. 185: under "typical units" you list Typical armour Skill tree, and then list a Skill column.

p. 186: Typical artillery Skill Tree: Indirect Fire 3, Camouflage 2, Movement 1. artillery's (s/b Artillery's)

p. 187: Prepared positions: this unit was set up long before the battle (artillery only). Before combat begins, it may add a the Aspect... (remove the "a" before the "the")

p. 192: example at bottom, with Sonja. First sentence starts in present tense, then switches to past tense. The rest is present tense.

p. 203: "Crush the white devils" should be made race neutral now that these are not Zulus.

p. 213: last line: "intertialess" has an extra t.

p. 220: "socail" is spelled wrong

p. 224: "yout" should be "your"

p. 224: unclosed parenthesis starting "(avoiding highports"

p. 226: "twice the Technology rating" referring to the stat cap should read, "the technology rating plus two"

p. 227: "...except the Heat track, which costs 2bp to increase gives back 1bp per decrease" (probably needs an "and" between increase and gives, or just a rephrasing in general.

p. 228: Spacecraft Design, Aspects: "Huge: if the Trade value is greater than or equal to twice the technology rating, the ship is Huge. If the V-shift rating is equal to or greater than twice the technology rating, then the ship is Huge (implies large amounts of reaction mass)." You should use the same phrasing for both. Or even simplify: "if either the Trade value or the V-shift rating are equal to or greater than twice the technology rating".

p. 230: clarification: Modal and Free Modal features give each mode a pool of build points equal to the build points for the tech level minus the cost of the modality feature.

p. 234: High capacity: should be deleted. (CWM: We might also consider deleting "Out of juice" on the same page.)

p. 234: The last line of the body text entry for Transfer Aspect is all on its own underneath the sidebar for Transfer Aspects. It just looks really bad. You should move it over to be with the rest of its entry, even though you have set two lines of space under most sidebars (see p. 3 Fudge Dice, p. 97 The Broadsword Rule, and p. 189 Compelling Movement, for exceptions).

p. 235: Agility section needs to be re-written: (Armour that isn't lightweight and flexible is hard to move around in, and characters wearing armour suffer -2 agility. However, "lightweight" and "flexible" can be bought off — either one of these stunts reduces the agility penalty to -1; both mean that there is no agility penalty (though that costs 5bp). You could get a bonus to your agility through powered armour as well. You are right that it's not as clear as it might be, and I'll consider rewording it.) (text to be finalized)

p. 236: top line. Delete "Increases cost by 1."

General

And I might have mentioned this one already?
The whole Making it Work section: You have four different styles of listing build point costs (Costs 1bp. Cost 1bp. Cost: 1bp. 1bp.) You should standardize them all, or list the first entry only with the word Cost (the same way for each list), and use only the "1 bp" format for all subsequent entries on the list.
GENERAL, playing with fate could use more concrete examples (such as present in social combat)

Things to consider

The equipment tables (p. 118) confuse me a bit. Are the stunts always there? What's the disadvantage to taking a crossbow with the Civilian stunt? (It costs less, and everyone can use it.) Or are all crossbows Civilian? In which case, they must cost 1 not 2 because that stunt reduces the cost?

You describe beam weapons as including rockets (p. 132). What then are torpedoes? (I think including the word "guided" would have helped.)

think I get the build system, what still confuses me is the tables (p. 118) and the text that precedes them.

Though on another reread it's starting to make sense. I think the issue is that you took info from the build system and included it here — "Civilian weapons are one level cheaper" is irrelevant, because it's already factored into the table.

(I think the text may be wrong, too — "The basic cost for a civilian slug thrower is 3" probably shouldn't say "civilian.")

IMO the text in chapter should not mention basic cost or civilian discount at all, only the tech adjustment. The charts speak for themselves, and the build system in chapter 9 can cover base cost.

The following need to be collated and integrated into the above.

From Simon:

p. 14
"... between stars only occur along..."
should be "occurs".

"... surpluses and deficiencies..."
Would "... surpluses and deficits..." fit better here?

"... by their statistics, and their Aspects."
Should be "... by their statistics and their Aspects."

"A place where two slipknots exist..."
This is a sentence fragment.

p. 15
"... tied for best sum or crappiest sum..."
Perhaps "poorest sum" might fit better than "crappiest" in this context.

p. 17
"...-a small device, but capable..."
Might read better as ""...-a small device capable... "

p. 32
Generating Aspects, bullet point 1: missing a terminating period.

p. 36
Bureaucracy
"... a apex Skill..."
Should be "... an apex Skill..."

p. 37
Computer (space)
"... repair and restore in real time."
Should be "... repair and restore it in real time."

"... evaluate data system..."
Should be "... evaluate data systems..."

"... to evaluate a data system, use a sophisticated computer to find some hidden data, or reprogram..."
Should be "... to evaluate a data system, to use a sophisticated computer to find some hidden data, or to reprogram..."

"... a apex Skill..."
Should be "... an apex Skill..."

p. 38
Engineering (space)

"... to fix Consequences on a ship, assess the state of a vessel, or make..."
Should be "... to fix Consequences on a ship, to assess the state of a vessel, or to make..."

"... a apex Skill..."
Should be "... an apex Skill..."

p. 39
MicroG (combat)
"... never making "up-bias" mistakes..."
Should be "... never makes "up-bias" mistakes..."

"... instinctively ignoring ballistics..."
Would it be better as "... instinctively compensating for ballistics..."?

p. 43
Weapon Familiarity is listed as being optional in the section above, but it might be appropriate for this to be in the heading as well. Something like:
weapon familiarity (optional)

"Archaic weaponry" and "precollapse weaponry" seem like superior choices.

p. 44
"... when buying something or assisting..."
Should be "... when buying something or when assisting..."

"... all the same rules as the other stress tracks do, though..."
Should remove "as" or "do".

p. 47
"... higher than the system maximum..."
Should be "... higher than the cluster maximum..."

"... functionality of a T2 or T1 piece of gear."
Might read better as "... functionality of a T1 or T2 piece of gear."

p. 49
"... agreed that it the Stunt..."
Should be "... agreed that if the Stunt..."

Equipment
The first sentence of this section may be a run on sentence.

p. 50
"... unless there is also an Stunt..."
Should be "... unless there is also a Stunt..."

"Nevertheless, things do not stay at the same quality once they are invented, and a T3 hand computer will be far superior to a T0 one."
Perhaps this works better:
"Nevertheless, things do not stay at the same quality once newer technology is invented: a T3 hand computer will be far superior to a T0 one."

p. 58
Sidebar
"... some of the art comes down from the halls".
Should this be "walls"?

"... begin at an aproproate facility..."
Appropriate spelled incorrectly.

"... can finally erase that consequence."
Should be "... can finally be erased."

p. 62
"It be be, though, that the referee, ..."
There are a lot of commas in this sentence.

p. 65
"... gravity would crush the frame; ..."
Wouldn't atmospheric drag be a bigger problem? After all, many ships can accelerate at multiple gravities. One could imagine that a properly equipped ship could tail-land on an airless moon (assuming the inhabitants don't mind a massive ship's fusion torch being dragged over their landscape). This is covered somewhat on p. 224.

"... accelerating to a midpoint at 1.0-1.5 G, turn around, decelerate at..."
Should be "... accelerating to a midpoint at 1.0-1.5 G, turning around, decelerating at..."

p. 66
Slipping between systems
It's not clear what advantage decelerating into the slipknot has, as you exit with a random vector. If momentum was conserved (which is not a random vector), this might make more sense.

p. 68
"It's more a measure of r-mass and fuel efficiency and available fuel than anything else."
I assume fuel here also refers to r-mass, in which case "available fuel" is covered by "r-mass".

p. 70
Overburn
The two paragraphs here seem to mean the same thing. If so, perhaps preface the second with "In other words, ".

p. 72
"... in this case only, free tags may not be stacked."
The following bolded text seems to clarify this be mean all Aspects, whether free-taggable or not:
"... in this case only, Aspects may not be stacked."

p. 74
"If character sells an item that is owned from a Stunt... then all financial effects are cleared..."
Does this mean financial effects relative to its Cost as described in the section above, rather than all?

p. 75
"... needs to roll it's Trade Skill..."
Should be "its".

p. 76
Why does the "Tapered Frog" have a required Maintenance roll of 6?

p. 77
"They may serve in other crew positions (with the standard penalties) as well".
Why would a broker receive penalties for serving in other crew positions, unless he was trying to broker during combat?

p. 80
"when, in space, some vessel wants another vessel..."
Might read better as "when some vessel wants another vessel..."

p. 82
"... straight up as a pre-generate place..."
Should be "pre-generated".

p. 83
"Ships they didn't know exist but knew..."
Should be "existed".

"Branch Sokju currently hold the most power but it is far from absolute since their catchy slogan of 'explore the lore' during the last election."
"hold" should be "holds".
Should this be:
"Branch Sokju currently holds the most power due to their catchy slogan of 'explore the lore' during the last election, but it is far from absolute."

"The fact that in order to successfully impose this belief would require spacecraft from other worlds..."
Should be:
"The fact that in order to successfully impose this belief they would require spacecraft from other worlds..."

Stealing Supplies: this appears to be a run-on sentence. Maybe split it at "... just that. Without any real law..."

p. 84
"And Warships."
Should warships be capitalized?

p. 86
"... arc, Gravity's rainbow, stretches..."
Should be "... arc, Gravity's Rainbow stretches..."

"... and for space, reduced to almost nothing."
"... and for space, was reduced to almost nothing."

"... all other planets had been incorporated..."
Might read better as "... all other planets were incorporated..."

p. 87
"The Xenians, they don't feel worthy of calling themselves Chomals, eke out an existence..."
Might read better as "The Xenians (they don't feel worthy of calling themselves Chomals) eke out an existence..."

"aventure ideas" - adventure spelled incorrectly.

p. 90
"... as they came and went, training, burning out, and moving on."
This is different than p. 51:
"... as they came and went: training them, burning them out, and moving them on."

p. 92
"With people leaving with every passing ship..."
Might read better as "With people leaving on every passing ship..."

p. 96
"Any borders between zones that is especially difficult..."
"is" should be "are".

"... in which case the border reverts permanently to the new state's pass value..."
"reverts permanently to" should be "remains permanently at".

p. 99
"... can engage in is one zones regardless..."
"zones" should be singular.

p. 102
Sidebar
"It might not be clear to how phrase actions..."
Might read better as "It might not be clear how to phrase actions..."

p. 107
Recovering stress box hits
Is the last paragraph repeating the previous sentence?

"... Composure stress hits are..."
Should be "... Composure stress track hits are..."

p. 108
Using a medic seems to be no better than the natural healing described on the previous page. Is this section to be used for dramatic effect where appropriate?

p. 114
"The basic cost for a civilian slug thrower..."
"Civilian" should be removed from this sentence.

"... requires and Assets check..."
"And" should be "an".

p. 115
Slug thrower aspects
Concealed "... minimum range:0"
Should be "... minimum range: 0."

p. 116
"Out of juice: powered armour gets the Aspect..."
"Powered armour" should be "weapon".

p. 118
Fists
"Composure damage only if untrained;"
Extra semicolon.

p. 120
attack, bullet point 6:
"... (wth any modifications..."
"wth" - "with" misspelled.

bullet 11:
"A previously recorded roll cannot be further modified in a new action."
The sidebar on p. 81 mentions the defender spending fate points on subsequent attacks. Which is correct?

p. 123
"a threat so powerful the only real option is to surrender"
Would this read better as "a threat so powerful that the only real option is to surrender"

p. 124
A default gunner is mentioned for torpedoes, but not for beams.

p. 126
"... unless you really like the map."
Should "map" be "math"?

"a piece of ruled paper, number each line..."
Might read better with a semicolon instead of a comma

Can a ship attack multiple targets with beams or torpedoes in a single turn? It could be interesting to divide a Kestrel's torpedo rating among multiple targets in larger battles.
Perhaps this could be the perk for Military-grade Gunnery. If it were, it should be useable for both beams and torpedoes.

Here is some more errata. I'm up to p. 183 - should I attempt to find more, or am I out of time?


p. 128
"... reducing the information available..."
Doesn't information increase as the turn proceeds? Is it options that decrease as the turn proceeds?

p. 129
"... proceed to phase 1 or directly to phase 2."
"... going to phase 1 ... going to phase 2."
The phase numbers are only listed on the summary sheet. Would it be better to name the phases explicitly?
"... proceed to Position phase or directly to Electronic Warfare phase."
"... going to Position phase ... going to Electronic Warfare phase."

p. 131
"The defender also makes a roll, of his ship's EW rating..."
Unnecessary comma between "roll, of".

p. 132
"... in whatever phase the player ship was compelled."
Should this be "player's"?

"Ship's may have a Stunt..."
Should be "Ships".

p. 133
"All combat rolls, offensive and defensive, are made at the Torpedo rating..."
Torpedos are purely offensive, are they not?

p. 134
"... may now be made on Frame stress tracks... or Data stress tracks..."
Should this be "and" rather than "or"?

"The number of successes indicate the track box..."
Should be:
"The number of shifts indicates the track box..."

p. 135
"Mild Consequence reduces the number of shifts by one..."
Should be "A mild consequence..."

"A ship that takes eight shifts more than its Frame stress track cannot be saved."
Can Consequences still be taken? One could imagine the defenders might want a consequence such as "Cargo hold destroyed" if they were facing capture.

"Remember that at any time during the fight but before damage is marked..."
Remove "but".

p. 136
"... glowing orange or red."
Since the ships are docked, wouldn't their reactors be on standby? If so, I can't imagine they'd generate enough heat to make their radiators glow.

"The wings aren't strong enough to work under thrust..."
While under thrust significant heat would be generated, and so the radiators would probably need to be extended.
The radiators would likely be retracted while in combat, as they're large and delicate.

"... can be repaired with any respectable facility..."
Would "at" fit better than "with"?

p. 137
"... a guideline for the time of repairs..."
Would "duration" fit better than "time"?

p. 138
"... indicates the boarding action to be successful by the end of the following turn."
Might read better if "to" is replaced with "will".

p. 139
"... they do not possess the Stunt, "Skeleton Crew"...
Unnecessary comma.

p. 141
"The combination of speed and monstrous battery..."
Should be "the monstrous battery".

p. 143
"... beyond the typical owner's home technology to replace".
Might read better as:
"... beyond the ability of the typical owner's home technology to replace".

p. 147
The other full page ship descriptions have names. This ship is referred to as "Wild Weasel" on p. 148, but not here.
Should the name be: "T2 Wild Weasel Electronic Warfare Platform"?
If so, the "Wild Weasel" aspect may need to be renamed.

p. 151
"... running guns through blockads or..."
Should be "blockades".

"Vector randomizer: defense 2 vs. Beam."
To be consistent, should be:
"Vector randomizer: base defense 2 against beam."

"T3 Slipdrive"
No other descriptions list the tech level of the slipdrive.

p. 156
electronic warfare
5. c.
The defender should not be awarded spin for EW defense (p. 10).

p. 157
"Ship's Beam roll from..."
"Ship's Torpedo roll from..."
These seem awkward.

p. 164
"This is tactically rich: do you get rid of competition..."
This may be a run-on sentence.

"... by creating and atmosphere of superficial..."
Should be "an atmosphere".

p. 166
"... rolls 4dF + Skill, then modify by..."
Should be "modifies".

p. 167
In the inquisition example, it's not clear why the victim would take a consequence - wouldn't falling unconscious through a Taken Out be preferable to confessing?

p. 168
"All stress box hits are removed after a few days of relaxing stress-free downtime."
On p. 107, "Consequently all Health and Composure stress track hits are cleared at the first instance of downtime..."
However, the following sentence on p. 107 matches the above.

p. 169
"... and if the associated stress track takes hit in a fight..."
Should be "a hit".

"... the map, the actors, and "pawns.""
Should be "and the "pawns.""

"The map is drawn as above."
Since the map is on the following page, "below" might fit better.

"... a 5-cap skill tree..."
Should this be a "skill pyramid"?

How many fate points do the pseudo-characters receive?

p. 171
"This time leveraging their Assets..."
Should be:
"This time they leverage their Assets..."

"... but is compelled to inaction; they deny..."
"They" is split inappropriately across two lines.

Nobles are referred to as Aristocracy.

p. 172
Nobles are referred to as Aristocracy.

"... for the Aristorcracy..."
Aristocracy mispelled.

"... zone 6, all or them..."
Should be "all of them".

"... sympathetic Noble ear, organize a general strike..."
Should be:
"... sympathetic Noble ear, that they organize a general strike..."

p. 173
"I would."
First person seems out of place here.
Perhaps:
"It seems likely."

p. 174
social combat play sheet
"2. For each player, callers asks..."
Caller should be singular.

"... and declare the target..."
Perhaps:
"... and asks for the target..."

Missing periods on:
2. b, c, e, f, g
3.

"Once all players have taken a turn..."
Should this be:
"Once all characters have taken a turn..."

composure attack
Missing period for bullet point 1.

3. "... exactly as any other roll."
Roll should be plural.

p. 175
maneuver
"... may be free-tagged once in the course of the scene."
Should this be:
"... may be free-tagged once by an ally in the course of the scene."

move another
Missing period for bullet point 1.

3. "... exactly as any other roll."
Roll should be plural.

"You may not use the same Skill twice in a row."
This should be grouped in the previous paragraph, as it's a restatement.

p. 178
sidebar
A platoon is composed of 2-6 teams, not 2-6 squads?

The terms "team" and "unit" seem to be used interchangeably.

p. 179
sidebar
"OOC counters (~10 per platoon - gain, poker..."
Should be "again".

"A1, B1....)"
Extra period after the ellipsis.

p. 182
"Skills are an n-cap pyramid... or a column..."
Should this be:
"Skills are an n-cap pyramid... or an n-cap column..."

p. 182-183
"... by a platoon Consequence, it is eliminated."
Should "eliminated" be "Taken Out"?

p. 183
"Infantry units represented a..."
Should be "represent".

"... other mobile armoured platform."
Platform should be plural.

"... capable of Indirect Fire which are kept off map."
Might read better as:
"... capable of Indirect Fire, and are kept off map."

"SPOT-TED"
Inappropriate word break.

From Mark Delsing:

Possible Errata:

p. xi, "But the blood the flowed through Lawrence's veins..."
Should be "But the blood that flowed through...."

p.4, "There are no necessary mechanical Consequences of this..."
"Consequences" should possibly not be capitalized since this is speaking generally, not about Consequences as in the damage mechanic.

p.9, "by the time the turn comes back to whoever generated it..."
Perhaps should be "back to whomever"?

p.14 "Faster-than-light travel between stars only occur along these paths."
Should be "only occurs along".

p.24, near the top: "(war, pollution, botched terraforming...)"
Is an ellipsis needed here? Maybe end with "etc" rather than trail off.

p.27, "Or just let you book passage?"
Looks like there's an extra space between "book" and "passage".

p.28, near the bottom, "Interests of the system is determined..."
Should be "are determined".

p.29, last paragraph, "Due to the hazardous natural of the planetoids..."
Should be "hazardous nature of".

p.29, last paragraph, "Robotics run many of the factories..."
Verb should be "runs" if speaking of the science of robotics.
If "robotics" is supposed to be some sort of plural (assuming a "robotic" is a single robot for some reason), then it's fine as-is.

p.47
"...a character with such a Stunt to also have Assets 1 in her Skill pyramid."
The character in question would need to have Assets in her pyramid to utilize the Stunt (Swap a Skill). Redundant?

p.48
"Combat medic... bonus on rolls..."
Extra space before "rolls" needs to be removed.

p.69
"Typical destination inside a system will be around that number..."
Should read: "Typical destinations inside..."

p.71
"It’s not a reward granted by the referee to player characters but is instead integral to the character each player has intended."
Awkward? Maybe, "as each player has intended"?

"A failure does generate a hit..."
Awkward? "A failure generates a hit..." seems simpler.

p.73 (example)
"A moderate Consequence can be cleared by anyone (including the character) with an Assets check against difficulty one..."
Peeve. Throughout the book, target numbers and modifiers are often written out, e.g. "four" instead of "4". My gut wants any reference to dice and target numbers to be actual numbers. I think it makes scanning for rule text easier. Just a thought.

p.74
"That's a Assets check of 5 and Bendigo..."
Should read: "...an Assets check..."

p.75
"The ship needs to roll it’s Trade Skill against a target value of zero..."
Should read: "...roll its Trade Skill..."

"If the ship has spent more than travel time to and from a slipknot..."
Should maybe read: "...more than the travel time..."

p.76
"The effects of speculative cargo may have a positive or negative value: roll the dice, and apply –2 to the Trade roll..."
I kind of balked at "roll the dice." What dice? Maybe be explicit and say "make a Trade roll, and..."

p.82
"But there is an atmosphere, that is breathable..."
Should read: "But there is an atmosphere that is breathable..."

"...(who refer to themselves simply as "the People" begins in the dark..."
Should read: "...(who refer to themselves simply as "the People") begins in the dark..."

p.83
"Recently Saang developed the technology to properly explore their system, as they ventured out..."
Should read: "Recently Saang developed the technology to properly explore their system. As they ventured out..."

"Ships they didn't know exist but knew shouldn't be there."
Should read: "Ships they didn't know existed but knew shouldn't be there."

"Saang may be an up and coming power..."
Should read: "Saang might be..."

'pushing into the heavens'
'explore the lore'
I guess I wanted to see double-quotes around these, given other examples of similar usage in the book.

"However it remains to be seen..."
Should read: "However, it remains to be seen..."

"Branch Sokju current hold the most power..."
Should read: "Branch Sokju current holds the most power..."

"Jjan Migukk push forward Saang's unquestioned right..."
Should read: "Jjan Migukk pushes forward Saang's unquestioned right..."

The "Stealing Supplies" paragraph is awkward. Possible alternative:
"Stealing Supplies: the outer reaches of the Saang system are ripe for the taking, and a few other people are doing just that. Without any real law in the system (since Saang is incapable of policing its space), the players can make some quick cash by raiding a mining colony of its hoard and selling it out-of-system to the highest bidder."

p.84
"...mineral rights or some other thing of value (referees get creative!) The players..."
Should read: "...mineral rights or some other thing of value (referees, get creative!). The players..."

p.86
"...Gravity's rainbow, stretches between LaGrange? points..."
Should read: "...Gravity's Rainbow stretches between LaGrange? points..."

p.87
"With the surplus came scientific advancement, the world realized it was no longer the centre of the galaxy but it seemed the stars were there for the searching."
Should (possibly) read: "With the surplus came scientific advancement. The world realized it was no longer the centre of the galaxy, but it seemed the stars were there for the searching."

'the good old days'
Double quotes again?

"Cho Mal remains a treasure trove to be uncovered, what loot..."
Should read: "Cho Mal remains a treasure trove to be uncovered. What loot..."

p.88
"wasn't always this...lush"
Should read: "wasn't always this ... lush" (according to Bringhurst).

p.91
"...shattered Quantii's control and a hoard of software."
Should read: "...shattered Quantii's control and had a hoard of software."

"...the only splistream-capable system past its prime."
Should maybe read: "...their only splistream-capable system past its prime."

p.92
"I found the ship, and it still worked: there weren't many left that could put out these speeds: none of the the People could produce them."
One too many colons, methinks. Honestly, almost everywhere you guys use a colon, I wold use a semicolon. :)
Could maybe read: "I found the ship, and it still worked. There weren't many left that could put out these speeds: none of the the People could produce them."

p.93
"(Hopefully a city)!"
Should read: "(Hopefully a city!)"

p.96
"Any borders between zones that is especially difficult to cross..."
Should read: "Any borders between zones that are especially difficult to cross..."

p.99
"The maximum range characters can engage in is one zones regardless of the number of zones in the level."
Should read: "The maximum range characters can engage in is one zone regardless of the number of zones in the level."

p.101
"Combat is organized into turns of non-specific length, but each representing something between twenty seconds and a minute, depending on the actions described. Consequently, it may be assumed that more is happening within each round than is actually being described, and in a given round..."
Turns? Rounds? Based on later usage, I think all references to "round" need to be changed to "turn".

"Both attack and defense rolls may now be modified by invoked Aspects, tagged Aspects, spin (though only one of each type: see Playing with Fate) and any other available modifier."
BOth the use of "type" and the placement of the parenthetical is confusing.
Try this instead: "Both attack and defense rolls may now be modified by invoked or tagged Aspects (though only one from each scope: see Playing with Fate), spin and any other available modifier."

p.102
Sidebar: "It might not be clear to how phrase actions..."
Should read: "It might not be clear how to phrase actions..."

p.103
"... moved through with one turns' expenditure..."
Should read: "... moved through with one turn's expenditure..."

"He rolls a zero, which added to his agility..."
Should read: "He rolls a zero, which added to his Agility..."

"(Thorvald has Vehicle 3, but he specializes in water vehicles)"
I can't figure out why this is mentioned.

p.105
"...moving a boudoir in front of a hotel room door..."
Boudoir: "a woman's bedroom or private sitting room." That's some serious Stamina!

p.107
"Consequently all Health and Composure stress track hits are cleared at the first instance of downtime..."
Should read: "Consequently, all Health and Composure..."

p.110
"In these cases a loss of suit integrity (any Health track Consequence) has serious ramifications.
A hostile environment suit has lost integrity when the wearer takes any Health track Consequence."
Necessary to repeat the suit integrity rules like this?

p.114
"These will have the Thrown Stunt and they get to be re-used indefinitely, as with a firearm or laser."
Thrown weapons can be re-used indefinitely? I am confused.

p.117
Does Power Suit need to be its own Stunt? Is there ever a case where armour will have this Stunt and no other Power Suit Stunts?

pp.118-119
The tables in general seem to order their notes sections differently. Sometimes Aspects and Stunts are grouped with each other, sometimes not, and the order varies.

p.118
Some of the Brawling weapons have Aspects and Stunts, despite p.113 stating, "Brawling weapons do not have Aspects or Stunts."

Q: Knives are modal? Not free modal?

The self-loading pistol's notes say "choose a mode as an action." Shouldn't this just say "modal"?

p.119
The Stunts for the battlesuit seem to be in the wrong order compared to other examples, e.g., "power suit" and the power suit stunts are separated in the list.

The low-velocity pistol's notes say "choose a mode as an action." Shouldn't this just say "modal"?

Pulse laser pack through hand flamer entries each have an extra space after "low recoil".

Neural disruptor's "non-lethal" Stunt should read "non lethal".

p.121

1. 6 introduces the concept of opposed Maneuver rolls, though this is never mentioned in the rules for Maneuvers on p.103. I like opposed Maneuvers, but regardless, these two spots need to be reconciled.

"Seal a suit... Composure and health track hit..."
"Health" should be capitalized.

"Create an obstruction" entry #6: Is it necessary to say "(2/2/2)"?

p.124
"...(see sidebar on “Social Initiative”)."
There is no sidebar on Social Initiative in the book. "Sidebar" = "section"?

p.132
"Ship's may have a Stunt (Vector Randomizer) that changes the base from 0 to 2."
Should read: "Ships may have a Stunt (Vector Randomizer) that changes the base from 0 to 2."

"A ship with a Beam Skill can attack at a value from 1 up to the full Beam rating. ... He may apply any value from 1 to the full Beam rating."
Repetitive?

p.133
The torpedoes section never explains what torpedoes are, unlike the beams section. No idea if this is intentional or not.

p.132-133
It is never stated which stress track beams and torpedoes target. Later inference seems to be Frame, but it is never stated explicitly.

p.135
"Remember that at any time during the fight but before damage is marked, any spacecraft owner may negotiate a concession rather than play out."
Isn't it technically "before a ship is Taken Out"? Otherwise, players could always concede when a hit they can't mitigate is taken.

p.138
"In the turn in which any ship is moved to band 0, and there is at least one other ship at band 0, the ship entering the band may enter formation with another ship."
Should this read, "with the other ship" or something similarly more specific? The ship can only form with other ships at band 0, right?

"...the pirates board the target, while the characters in their ship maneuver about)."
The ending period should be inside the closing parenthesis: "...about.)"

p.148
"Designed to operate with the Wild Weasel..."
The Wild Who? Is this a reference to the T2 Electronic Warfare Platform on p.147?

p.141, p.143, p.147, p.148, p.151, p.152, p.154
All of the entries for Vector Randomizer are formatted or phrased differently. Which one is the right one?

p.151
The Scout Hunter has the Stunt, "T3 Slipdrive". None of the other ships attach a technology rating to their Slipdrive Stunt.

p.157
"4. Ship's Torpedo roll for each ship that declared a missile target..."
Should be "torpedo target" perhaps?

p.161
"...(Dealing with Time, Chapter 2)..."
Different format form other references, which are typically, "(see Chapter 2, Dealing with Time)".

p.164
"...dependent on the player's specific resources as a would-be lover."
I'm pretty sure you mean the *character's* specific resources. Unless we're talking about influencing the GM... :)

p.165
"The usual rules for tagging Aspects apply: you may tag only one of each category of Aspect..."
Should be: "...tag only one Aspect from each scope..."

p.166
"For a move action, the player rolls 4dF + Skill, then modify by any Aspects tagged or invoked."
Should read: "...then modifies by any Aspects..."

"...if he gets Simon to a target zone and keep him there..."
Should read: "...and keeps him there..."

p.169
"...and if the associated stress track takes hit in a fight during that session..."
Should read: "...and if the associated stress track takes hits in a fight during that session..."

p.170
"He speaks to the working class heart..."
Should be "Working Class" if we are speaking about the WC pseudo-character.

p.171
"...the tendency towards conservatism and order (Culture/Tech) effectively."
Should read: "...the tendency towards conservatism and order (Culture/Tech, effectively)."

p.172
"...they realize that with the working class..."
Should be "Working Class" if we are speaking about the WC pseudo-character.

"...Noble ear, organize a general strike"
Should read: "...Noble ear, that they organize a general strike". Sentence as a whole does not make sense otherwise.

pp.171-172
It reads like Culture/Tech is being rolled like any other Skill in the "changing history" example. I thought that Culture/Tech was never actually rolled (" it is not something that is subject to rolls," p. 42).

p.174
"2. For each player, callers asks for..."
Should read: "2. For each player, caller asks for..."

Lots of different usage of periods on this page; some entries end with them and some don't.

p.179
"(Chapter 5, Personal Combat)"
Should read: "(see Chapter 5, Personal Combat)" to be consistent, I think.

p.183
"Infantry units represented a small number of individuals of similar or concerted equipment..."
Should read: ""Infantry units represent a small number..."

p.184
"Artillery can only fire on targets that are in line-of-sight to a friendly unit that is currently attached to a platoon (or does not need to be) and has no Out Of Communications (OOC) counters."
Called "Out Of Communication (OOC) counters" on p.182. Which is right?

p.185
"A leader unit may perform a action in addition to its normal action. It may, therefore, make two actions in a turn."
Extra spaces (looks like) between "a action" and "two actions".

The Typical Units section uses the term "Skill tree," which is not used elsewhere. I'd think for each respective unit you'd want to say "Skill pyramid" or "Skill column," as applicable.

p.186
"Indirect Fire 3, Camouflage 2, Movement 1. artillery’s immediate objective is to destroy spotted enemy equipment."
Should read: "...Movement 1. Artillery’s immediate objective..."

p.187
"It may use its Indirect Fire Skill to effect Jam attacks..."
I don't think "Jam" is elsewhere capitalized when mid-sentence.

p.189
"The objective of the rule that makes you pause for a compel after every zone moved, is to..."
Should read: "...after every zone moved is to..."

p.190
"Roll any Skill and suppply some narration to describe the effect."
Only two P's in "supply".

p.191
"Roll Camouflage against a target value of zero and reduce any SPOTTED markers on the unit by the number of hits achieved."
Should read: "...shifts achieved."

p.192
"A single character stand..."
p.193
"...the primary value of a character attached to a stand is.."
What's a stand?

p.194
"A dug in force attempts..."
Should read: "A dug-in force attempts..."

pp.192-202
The Technology Enhancement Stunt is formated in different ways for different units. Some write it out, some use numbers, some capitalize Skills, some don't. Which one is right?

p.199
RAP Coilgun's Skills are formatted differently from most other entries.

p.202
Heavy howitzer platoon's Skills are formatted differently from most other entries.

p.204
"...to reconsider their profession...or enlist."
Should be spaces around ellipsis, according to Bringhurst.

p.205
"...which are opposed rolls, and so put as lower skill."
Should read: "...which are opposed rolls, and so put as lower Skills."

p.206
"...for when going up against..."
Should maybe read: "...for when we're going up against..."

The "Relentless advance" Aspect should be a the end of the Mobile Bridge stat block to match other entries.

"...(higher values wold still be eroded in the regular way)..."
Pass values are not eroded in platoon combat, according to p.181.

p.209
"Each Consequence reduces the shifts by two..."
Contradicts p.192, which has platoon consequences using the standard 1/2/4.

"Roll any Skill + narrative..."
This just seems weird to me. "+ narrative"? I'd just use the phrasing on p.190.

"Roll Camouflage against a target value of zero and reduce any SPOTTED markers on the unit by the number of hits achieved."
Should read: "...shifts achieved."


p.212
"...their characters "about" that conflict."
Should be posessive "characters'" if I understand this sentence correctly.

p.220
"...what the actual goals of each party..."
Should be "what the actual goals are" or "what are the actual goals".

p.223
"Some range could be modeled perhaps by allowing attacks at range 0-1, but doing only damage 1."
What does "damage 1" mean? The attack only ever does 1 stress? Or should this read "harm 1" or "penetration 1"?

"As a maneuver, use Psionics, to put an Aspect on nearby individuals..."
Remove comma after "Psionics".

p.225
"...all other Aspects of maneuver are based..."
Lower-case "aspects" since it is being used generally, not in reference to FATE Aspect mechanics.

p.226
"All stats start at value zero and can be increase by 1bp/stat point..."
Change to "can be increased by".

"Stats at or below zero indicate a component that cannot be used offensively."
FWIW, this is the only place this rule is mentioned; it never comes up in the Starship Combat chapter.

p.227
"...as long as Pilot, and Navigation are represented..."
Remove comma; should read "Pilot and Navigation are".

"Vector randomizer: Defense 2 versus Beam
Firewall: Defense 2 versus EW
Point Defense:Defense 2 versus Torpedoes"
Periods at the end of these?

"Interface Vehicle" entry needs a closing period after "1bp".

p.228
"Fighters may be launched in any combat phase that the parent ship chooses not to act when it otherwise could do so."
Maybe should read, "any combat phase in which the parent ship chooses".

pp.229-234
The personal weapon design section lists costs differently form the other sections, using three variants: "Cost Xbp", "Cost: Xbp", and "Costs Xbp". Should be aligned with other sections, i.e., just "Xbp" at the end of each entry.

p.230
"...using the Agility Skill, at range 1-2."
Looks like there is an extra space before "at range".

"Weapon has the, “Out of ammo” Aspect..."
Remove comma; should read "Weapon has the “Out of ammo” Aspect...".

"Two-handed: weapons is designed..."
Should read: "weapon is designed..."

p.231
"Makes the weapon available to those without the Military-grade Stunt for slug throwers."
Initial-caps needed for "Slug Throwers" as I assume the Skill is being referenced.

p.232
"Concealed Weapon: automatic Aspect on anyone with a weapon with minimum range 0."
Should read: "...automatic Aspect on any weapon with..." These are Aspects on weapons, not their wielders, right?

p.235
"Flexible... allowing greater mobility, increasying the Agility penalty by 1."
This is correct in the SRD ("decreasing the Agility penalty"), but not the book.

Same goes for "Lightweight" Stunt.

p.236
"Crushing fists" and "Armoured penetrators": "His Brawling also does normal lethal damage rather than Composure damage (unless he prefers otherwise)."
Brawling does normally do lethal damage unless the character is untrained. I assume this Stunt lets untrained Brawling do lethal damage as well. Maybe specifically mention that is a benefit of the Stunt? You could probably drop "His" as well.

"Armour with a Defense value that cost more than (4+T) and does not have the Lightweight Stunt..."
Should read: "Defense value hat costs more than..."

"Armour with the Stunt Power Suit also gets the Aspect, "Out of Juice," which..."
Should read: "Out of juice".

"...also gets the Aspect "Industrial Equipment.""
Should read: "Industrial equipment."

"Armour with a Defense value higher than tech level..."
Higher than what tech level? Its own? Should maybe read: "higher that its tech level".

p.237
"He was excited, and he returned his telescope."
Should read: "...and he returned to his telescope."

p.238
"The Minister of Science and Defense, Abraham Tucker became very rich..."
Should read: "The Minister of Science and Defense, Abraham Tucker, became very rich..."